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Living Room / Re: Help Proofreading a submission
« Last post by TaoPhoenix on September 13, 2013, 12:54 PM »I've updated the sources (including Google Docs) after radio silence for a while. The deadline has been pushed to the 31st of Oct, but I'm still trying to get it done ASAP. I'm having trouble on the resolution- I've posted what I have for that last chapter, but I'm not convinced it's the right direction. It could be phantom limb pain as in my aggressive edits I removed a whole combat and action sequence, but looking at the goal of the wrap up and what I'm trying to accomplish, as cool as the setup on that last mission was, it wasn't really necessary. But now I'm struggling with how to convey the situation without telling it.-wraith808 (September 12, 2013, 12:30 PM)
(Disclosure - my focus has been bad again, I haven't read it - these are macro level comments!)
Hmm. Is there a word limit? (Why else wouldn't you just tell a situation?)
And about something being in the "right direction", what total overall mood are you trying for? I for one could suggest various things but if the desired mood is not what is actually there, it would go off track.

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