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Living Room / Re: 16K word sample of my sci-fi ebook, due on Amazon and B&N in October
« Last post by kyrathaba on June 16, 2013, 08:30 PM »
Early in Ch. 8, "would be spend" will be corrected to "would we spend"

“Understood, the administrator replied...    will be corrected to:      “Understood,” the administrator replied.

nature of the alien’s technology           will be corrected to:          nature of the aliens’ technology

said Sethra with conviction. I have            will be corrected to:               said Sethra with conviction. “I have




someday wormholes may not just allow humans to traverse vast galactic distances instantaneously; they may also

will be corrected to:

someday wormholes may not just allow humans to traverse vast galactic distances instantaneously. They may also




could prevent insanity. Experimentation over the past thirty years     will become:     could prevent insanity: experimentation over the past thirty years
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Living Room / Re: 16K word sample of my sci-fi ebook, due on Amazon and B&N in October
« Last post by kyrathaba on June 16, 2013, 08:08 PM »
Ok, full steam ahead, then  :D

Uploaded new archive containing up through end of Chapter 9.
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Living Room / Re: 16K word sample of my sci-fi ebook, due on Amazon and B&N in October
« Last post by kyrathaba on June 16, 2013, 01:42 PM »
@k - looks like you're running your very own private NaNoWriMo with this one. Grin

Keep going! Don't break the rhythm since you're apparently in the zone right now. We're all behind you 100%. Thmbsup

Much appreciated, 40hz  :)
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Living Room / Re: 16K word sample of my sci-fi ebook, due on Amazon and B&N in October
« Last post by kyrathaba on June 16, 2013, 09:57 AM »
Word-count Summary:

Prologue: 1,922 words
Chapter 1: 3,425 words
Chapter 2: 3,546 words
Chapter 3: 3,488 words
Chapter 4: 3,380 words
Chapter 5: 2,787 words
Chapter 6: 1,281 words
Chapter 7: 1,993 words
Chapter 8: 2,073 words

Total words (not counting front- or back-matter): 23,895 words
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Living Room / Re: 16K word sample of my sci-fi ebook, due on Amazon and B&N in October
« Last post by kyrathaba on June 16, 2013, 09:51 AM »
Hey, 4wd: if you want, I can hold off on uploading for a couple weeks, maybe get three or four more chapters written, giving you time to get back to and finish the book you were reading. Your call  :D
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Living Room / Re: 16K word sample of my sci-fi ebook, due on Amazon and B&N in October
« Last post by kyrathaba on June 16, 2013, 09:34 AM »
@4wd: you're phenomenal, bro! Made all the necessary corrections. Thank you!

I will upload my own Ch. 8 corrections, plus all these you've pointed out. The upload in the OP will be titled "KR_thanks_4wd.zip".
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Living Room / Re: 16K word sample of my sci-fi ebook, due on Amazon and B&N in October
« Last post by kyrathaba on June 15, 2013, 09:57 PM »
In next upload,

We don’t have implants now.

will be corrected to

We don’t have implants now.”



as if any appliance’s power cell were removed...

will become

as if an appliance’s power cell were removed.




 then Sethra admitted. “If they do either of those things

will become

 then Sethra admitted, “If they do either of those things
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Living Room / Re: 16K word sample of my sci-fi ebook, due on Amazon and B&N in October
« Last post by kyrathaba on June 15, 2013, 09:53 PM »
Zuzana tenses and sat up...

will be corrected in the next upload to:

Zuzana tensed and sat up.
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Living Room / Re: 16K word sample of my sci-fi ebook, due on Amazon and B&N in October
« Last post by kyrathaba on June 15, 2013, 09:45 PM »
Corrected missing space between "sir," and "although"
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Living Room / Re: 16K word sample of my sci-fi ebook, due on Amazon and B&N in October
« Last post by kyrathaba on June 15, 2013, 09:43 PM »
He knew the chance of that was vanishingly thin.

will be changed in next upload to:

He knew the chance of that was vanishingly slim.
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Living Room / Re: 16K word sample of my sci-fi ebook, due on Amazon and B&N in October
« Last post by kyrathaba on June 15, 2013, 09:37 PM »
Urgh...I'm never going to reach the end of this book...haven't managed to get to chapter 6 yet....

You don't have to start from the very beginning each time. I've not modified the earlier chapters for the past 2 or three uploads.

Why not just read the last two chapters each time I upload? Or is it a matter of complete thoroughness, making sure the entire book hangs together from page one?

If so, MAN you are dedicated!
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Living Room / Re: 16K word sample of my sci-fi ebook, due on Amazon and B&N in October
« Last post by kyrathaba on June 15, 2013, 09:35 PM »
This missing quotation mark before the word "Just" has been corrected and will appear in next upload.

“Understood, the administrator replied. Just make sure the robots disperse the rock far and wide once they exit the shaft.
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Living Room / Re: 16K word sample of my sci-fi ebook, due on Amazon and B&N in October
« Last post by kyrathaba on June 15, 2013, 09:07 PM »
Original post contains new upload: a zip archive containing EPUB and MOBI versions for the book, up through the end of Chapter 8. :)
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Living Room / Re: 16K word sample of my sci-fi ebook, due on Amazon and B&N in October
« Last post by kyrathaba on June 15, 2013, 06:36 PM »
From the research I've been doing, about 20% of the scifi being read right now is in ebook format.
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Living Room / Re: 16K word sample of my sci-fi ebook, due on Amazon and B&N in October
« Last post by kyrathaba on June 15, 2013, 06:35 PM »
Note: at the end of chapter six, the italicized "Wednesday, June 14, 2283, 0103 hours, Hidden Immersion Pod Chamber" should be:

Wednesday, June 13, 2283, 0103 hours, Hidden Immersion Pod Chamber


And at the beginning of Ch. 7, Wednesday, June 14, 2283, 1000 hours, Administrator Mephord’s office

should be:

Thursday, June 14, 2283, 1000 hours, Administrator Mephord’s office
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Living Room / Re: 16K word sample of my sci-fi ebook, due on Amazon and B&N in October
« Last post by kyrathaba on June 15, 2013, 04:42 PM »
^ You gonna ePub first, or are you seeking a print-run?
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Living Room / Re: 16K word sample of my sci-fi ebook, due on Amazon and B&N in October
« Last post by kyrathaba on June 15, 2013, 02:21 PM »
You are inspiring me to finish my work. smiley

^Same here! Thx for serving as a little kick in the butt K-Man! Thmbsup Grin

@wraith/40hz: Great! Glad I'm having that effect. What are you guys writing about? Or is a different sort of project?
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Living Room / Re: 16K word sample of my sci-fi ebook, due on Amazon and B&N in October
« Last post by kyrathaba on June 15, 2013, 09:43 AM »
Prologue through Chapter 7 is 21,824 words, to date.
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Living Room / Re: 16K word sample of my sci-fi ebook, due on Amazon and B&N in October
« Last post by kyrathaba on June 15, 2013, 09:13 AM »
Chapter 7 completed and uploaded to original post. There's now a single zip file. It contains both .epub and .mobi file versions.
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Living Room / Re: 16K word sample of my sci-fi ebook, due on Amazon and B&N in October
« Last post by kyrathaba on June 15, 2013, 09:09 AM »
Incidentally, this is probably going to be the longest book I've ever read since I start at page one with every iteration of it

Same here. Every time I add a chapter, I email the newly updated "book" to my tablet to see how it looks/reads on my tablet's Kindle app.
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Living Room / Re: 16K word sample of my sci-fi ebook, due on Amazon and B&N in October
« Last post by kyrathaba on June 15, 2013, 09:03 AM »
If Zuzana was to be included in the VR journey from the start now, I think you still only mention a total of "four total immersion pods" later in the meeting.

Only room in their hiding spot for four pods. Touchy subject that the five hadn't broached, as far as who gets left behind. Probably the good Dr. Hasser would have sacrificed his spot out of consideration for the pair of love-birds, and his own medical duties to the community. Or, Zuzana, being in relative terms the Johnny-come-lately to this group, might have had a tearful scene of parting with Byron. Or maybe Byron, nobly, would have knocked her out and sent her in his stead, asking Eddie to watch over her like a father...

BTW, I'm not turning this from a labour of love into a major PITA am I?

Not at all! I'm very much indebted to your thoroughness. It will be a much better novel because of your keen observations.

@40hz. Don't worry. There will be other references about the "hot readhead"  ;D
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Living Room / Re: 16K word sample of my sci-fi ebook, due on Amazon and B&N in October
« Last post by kyrathaba on June 15, 2013, 07:53 AM »
@4wd:

Around the card table, four people were in discussion, and not the garden variety chatter that always accompanies group pastimes. Nearby, a woman finished sampling a swimming pool and adjusting the pool water’s composition minutely with a tray of chemicals she carried. She was merely carrying out one of her many duties as an Environmental tech, but her other purpose in being here at this particular time was to be ready to provide backup, should her boyfriend Byron and the others get caught by the chief of security. She and Byron had been serious now for close to a year, and recently Sethra had taken her fully into his confidence. So while the other four plotted, she kept an eye surreptitiously on the man throwing darts, and the two people in the swimming pool.

and then later...

Byron spent the night two kilometers away, with his lover, Zuzana Wesley, in another cavern filled with residential cubicles. His neoprene blues and her greens were in a tangled heap at the foot of the bed. “Did you guys get some details worked out?” she asked sleepily. “Yes,” Byron replied. “We’ll make our move soon. Be ready for Sethra’s chime.”

I've implemented your other suggested re-wordings. You'll see them when I upload new version with Ch. 7.

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Living Room / Re: 16K word sample of my sci-fi ebook, due on Amazon and B&N in October
« Last post by kyrathaba on June 15, 2013, 07:09 AM »
Every single point is spot-on, 4wd. Thanks for taking the time. I will post-up how I'm correcting these.
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Living Room / Re: 16K word sample of my sci-fi ebook, due on Amazon and B&N in October
« Last post by kyrathaba on June 14, 2013, 10:14 PM »
Okay, first 900 words of Chapter 7 are done. Calling it a night. Chapter 7 will be longer than 5 or 6 were.
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Living Room / Re: 16K word sample of my sci-fi ebook, due on Amazon and B&N in October
« Last post by kyrathaba on June 14, 2013, 09:42 PM »
Nice find, 40! I've bookmarked it and imagine I'll definitely take advantage of it before submitting it for e-publishing.
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