A few possibles:
Chapter 11:
The two occurrences of multi limbed - should be, (I believe): multi-limbed
Every other occurrence is Ericson Cavern.
The 'not only' seems to indicate the two sentences should be one:
For this staff meeting, Administrator Mephord had summoned not only Dr. Mary Pilsner, Dr. Jaimie Ericson, and Security Chief Mark Shields, he'd also requested the attendance of medical doctor and biologist Dorian Graham, one of those who’d been involved in the meticulous dissection of the alien slain in the Shaft on June 11th.
Or remove 'not only' to keep them separate:
For this staff meeting, Administrator Mephord had summoned Dr. Mary Pilsner, Dr. Jaimie Ericson, and Security Chief Mark Shields. He had also requested the attendance of medical doctor and biologist Dorian Graham, one of those who’d been involved in the meticulous dissection of the alien slain in the Shaft on June 11th.
... To date, twenty-three of our ninety androids have been given a thumbs-up by the team Dr. Pilsner has on this,”
In fact, we need a live specimen that we can monitor over an extended period of time with our equipment.
Or:
In fact, we need a live specimen that we can observe over an extended period of time with our monitoring equipment.
In the newly discovered cavern, scaffolding now traversed a long section of the wall the boring machine had penetrated.
These triplets were then welded and bonded near the tops of pairs of massive steel stanchions, which were spaced every ten meters along the length of the cavern.
Chapter 11:
The two occurrences of multi limbed - should be, (I believe): multi-limbed
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....what had been dubbed Cavern Ericson
Every other occurrence is Ericson Cavern.
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For this staff meeting, Administrator Mephord had summoned not only Dr. Mary Pilsner, Dr. Jaimie Ericson, and Security Chief Mark Shields. He had also requested the attendance of medical doctor and biologist Dorian Graham, one of those who’d been involved in the meticulous dissection of the alien slain in the Shaft on June 11th.
The 'not only' seems to indicate the two sentences should be one:
For this staff meeting, Administrator Mephord had summoned not only Dr. Mary Pilsner, Dr. Jaimie Ericson, and Security Chief Mark Shields, he'd also requested the attendance of medical doctor and biologist Dorian Graham, one of those who’d been involved in the meticulous dissection of the alien slain in the Shaft on June 11th.
Or remove 'not only' to keep them separate:
For this staff meeting, Administrator Mephord had summoned Dr. Mary Pilsner, Dr. Jaimie Ericson, and Security Chief Mark Shields. He had also requested the attendance of medical doctor and biologist Dorian Graham, one of those who’d been involved in the meticulous dissection of the alien slain in the Shaft on June 11th.
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.... Twenty-three of our ninety androids have been given a thumbs-up by the team Dr. Pilsner has on this, to date,”
... To date, twenty-three of our ninety androids have been given a thumbs-up by the team Dr. Pilsner has on this,”
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In fact, we need a live specimen that we can observe over an extended period of time while monitoring it with equipment.
In fact, we need a live specimen that we can monitor over an extended period of time with our equipment.
Or:
In fact, we need a live specimen that we can observe over an extended period of time with our monitoring equipment.
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Along the wall the boring machine had penetrated, scaffolding traversed a long section of the newly discovered cavern’s length.
In the newly discovered cavern, scaffolding now traversed a long section of the wall the boring machine had penetrated.
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Near the tops of pairs of massive steel stanchions, spaced every ten meters down the length of the cavern, these triplets were being welded and bonded.
These triplets were then welded and bonded near the tops of pairs of massive steel stanchions, which were spaced every ten meters along the length of the cavern.
