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I don't disagree... I just immediately thought of the more simplistic answer that if A-3 had been destroyed then it didn't matter if they were in A-3 physically or a computer in A-3, they'd be dead either way.

Changed the passage to read as so:

Zuzana turned the spitted rabbits. “What if, on a lark, the aliens decide to implode every subterranean compound, or to launch a kinetic missile of sufficient mass to demolish the globe? What happens to us then?”
There was a lengthy pause before Sethra admitted, “If they do either of those things in the near future, then our existence will suddenly end.”
“Near future?” asked Byron, seeking clarification.
“I’ve a theory, but I’m not ready to try to articulate it, yet,” said Sethra.
They paused in their discussion to eat, pulling hot bits of surprisingly savory flesh from their cooked meal. As the night deepened and it grew cooler, they donned their cloaks and bedded down. Into the flickering shadows cast by the lowering fire, Veronee asked, “What’s the name of this reality, anyway?”

and anything else you want included

You shouldn't prejudge the worth or value of something, by its outward appearance alone".

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You're awesome... so Jammie is standing and taller than 155-170cm?

Well, it wasn't that hard 

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Chapter 14
Page 23.3 "Unless they grew so long that they broke off and fell into the pool." Do you think he would have seen evidence

on the ceiling of the cave of the remains of broken stalactites?

Eventually they would have found such evidence, but remember the modal height of the cavern roof is 40 meters, too far to

see clearly without powerfully spotlighting it. There were survey bots that crawled all over the cavern, but it would take

time for their data to be aggregated, and even then Grant Thompson probably wouldn't have had immediate access to such

reports (though Dr. Jaimie Ericson would).

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Page 23.8 "Gliding along the bottom, Grant noted “No loose stone or other detritus." Does that need punctuation?

'Gliding along the bottom, Grant noted, “No loose stone or other detritus.'

Yes, it does. Thanks!

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Chapter 15
Page 24.3 "The training that King Molech had mentioned the previous night at supper had begun after a breakfast of some

sort of hot creamed wheat flavored by diced up pieces of peaches." What do you think of 'The training that King Molech had

mentioned the previous night at supper had begun after a breakfast, which consisted of some sort of hot creamed wheat

flavored by diced up pieces of peaches.'... I kept stumbling over the sentence when reading it out, so it may just be me?

That does flow better, yes.

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Page 24.5 "The noise of clashing practice swords drifted up to them from the courtyard below" Would they have known

what practice swords sounded like?

That's a bit of narration for the reader's benefit.

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Page 24.12 "Please, continue educating us about the Ashwood and the orcs." Everywhere else 'The Ashwood'

Good catch, Perry. Fixed.

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Page 24.19 "She turned in about in her fingers" should be 'it'

I hate it when I make those most basic of typos. Yet they're so common. Like "is" instead of "it". Thanks!

I joined the forum just to tell you how much I've been enjoying the book.  I was going to offer to do a little proof reading, but it appears that you have some expert help in that area.

and we'd be thankful if you didn't distract K too much so he can get back to writing

“Thanks for the ‘UT’, buddy. He set his cup on the table, then slid the data chip across the table. You keep that damned safe, S-man. We’ll talk later. Door, open for guest to exit.”

...and maybe a couple dozen meter deeper.

Sallow-faced, and he had to have been even notably fatter, six months ago, than he appeared to be today.

...trying to take the emotional temperature of the group as a whole.

“Ease down off that railing and I’ll answer both questions, in either order you prefer,” quipped Sethra.

Such puling drivel just about justifies their slow deaths he reflected.

...and power cells to run them for up to at least thirty-six hours.

Nothing will hinge on one single weak leak in the chain.

...once we go under into immersion, ...

That night Veronne stayed with Sethra in his cubicle.