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Help with Proofing?
Renegade:
Thank you!
I've updated the file with revisions. (Nothing major so far, so if you have the previous version, that's perfectly fine.)
Renegade:
Owww I had to sent the feedback in a private message ?
Must i do something else ?
-Contro (September 13, 2013, 08:50 AM)
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Send it by email to the address I listed above in the original post. I don't think you can send files by PM. (Thanks!)
Contro:
:-[
What file i have to send ?
What file sent you 4wd ?¿?¿?¿
A corrected text ? But the text is wonderful !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Coloquial language. I have to see several phrases in the translator.
I think only 4wd or any other clever native can give you in deepness details of the text. :tellme:
I even have to see for DD significance. First I suppose to be Big Breasts, but finally assumed Design Driver.
:-\
;D
Renegade:
:-[
What file i have to send ?
What file sent you 4wd ?¿?¿?¿
A corrected text ? But the text is wonderful !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Coloquial language. I have to see several phrases in the translator.
I think only 4wd or any other clever native can give you in deepness details of the text. :tellme:
I even have to see for DD significance. First I suppose to be Big Breasts, but finally assumed Design Driver.
:-\
;D
-Contro (September 13, 2013, 09:05 AM)
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Hahaha! :D
4wd pointed out some minor errors/typos. Don't worry about those. Proofing your own work is a really bad idea. (I'll actually proof it for grammar/spelling later, but I need to let it "rest" for a bit for that.)
Don't worry about the specific language used. A critique on parts of the story/plot would be great.
Contro:
It's a short story in my opinion. :-[
But You give the two signal points : the antenna and the eye patch. So when He takes off the patch..... Natural ..... Or naturally hypernatural. The antenna receives the signal. Rather is a scientific story and you, that likes and understand mobiles, knows than in a few years the soldiers will have implants.
;D
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