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I apologize to Perry and 4wd for going ahead and working on the manuscript, because I'd said I'd pause until we caught up with proofing the existing material. But when inspiration struck, I had to get it written while it was fresh in my mind. Hope my two proofreaders will forgive me.-kyrathaba (July 15, 2013, 10:21 AM)
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No need, I was going to tell you to keep going today ;)

It's also better this way due to the time difference, another reason that it would have good to have someone from USA/EU also.

Not too late, we just don't seem to have any takers.

Perry and 4wd, I'm gonna do a read-through on my tablet's Kindle app. I seem to spot errors easier that way. I'll coordinate my fixing of the manuscript with updating the Google Doc (you guys will have already spotted the errors anyway, most likely). Tomorrow, I'm taking my dad to another city to see a couple of specialists, but I should be able to dig into the Google Doc over the next few days.

I was thinking of the following excerpt being placed before the blurbs on the first page, to snag the browsing shopper. What do you think?

     The alien almost danced upon his tentacles, so pleasurable were the psychic emanations of terror pouring off of Eddie Hasser. Veins pulsed in its head, torso, and each massive tentacle. The alien snaked closer to Hasser, who had run out of breath, and was leaning forward, holding his gloved hands against the sharp pain in his chest. The man’s eyes bulged, and his mouth formed a helpless “O”.
     “Let’s see if we can increase your terror without killing you,” the creature crooned. It’s head deformed and then quickly reformed into a bulbous, hooded thing that, as it turned out, Eddie Hasser’s heart couldn’t tolerate. The good doctor collapsed forward, helmeted head bouncing once on the corrugated aluminum mesh floor.
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As someone who has *not* read (so indicative of one of your potential readers, perhaps), that wouldn't entice me.  I think in most of those cases, those blurbs (1) give you an idea of the book- which that one does to an extent, but not as much as I think it should, and (2) get you wondering about what's going on- many times with a cliffhanger at the end.

Of course, that's just my humble opinion, but I figured I'd offer it. :)

I draw a distinction between a blurb and an excerpt. I meant the above as an excerpt, but perhaps something like the following would give a better overall idea of the book:

170 years from now, aliens decimate Earth. A relative handful of humans survive, hidden in deep subterranean enclaves that offer some protection from surface radiation. Although the main attack is now seven years in the past, one alien ship remains in orbit, and the conquerors are not content merely to let humanity lick its wounds. See the depths of courage and ingenuity this crisis brings out in the heroes of post-apocalyptic Earth.
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