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Main Area and Open Discussion / Living Room / Re: 29K word sample of my sci-fi ebook, due on Amazon and B&N in October
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on: June 17, 2013, 09:08:09 PM
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So where is the app that is going to come out of this regarding the facilitation of exchange and management of change suggestions in written works? Microsoft Word in mark-up mode? Although I know what you mean, ewemoa. Why don't you code it for NANY 2014? I've used Google docs successfully for small numbers of people, tho' the rules are not there like in MSWord. Wouldn't a change timeline feature be cool (so you could see the evolution by changing a slider)... or even author selector...
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Main Area and Open Discussion / Living Room / Re: 16K word sample of my sci-fi ebook, due on Amazon and B&N in October
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on: June 16, 2013, 08:31:00 PM
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Chapter 1,
page 9.27: "build a sight deeper than this" should be "site"
page 9.32: "No need for a nuclear strike, if these aliens were sophisticated enough to slay a quarter of the population with a long-range electronic virus they bathed the planet in before they were even all the way in-system" despite 4wd's observations I think that the use of "a" and "they" causes confusion in my mind (tho' I'm no grammar expert either)... but I would have something like "a long-range..., which they..." or "the long-range... that they" type thing.
Chapter 2,
page 10.4: "Most of the compounders felt too sick to engage in exercise on any of the machines in the gym section, though one or two people were currently in the large and lengthy pool, here in Rec-area #2" I would have thought that was not necessary, as that's what is being discussed?
page 10.17: "“Chief of Security to Shaft Access Tunnel. Who’s on patrol, there?” he sent out via his communications console." Doesn't quite work for me...
page 10.33 "Nothing will hinge on one single weak leak in the chain", should be "link"?
page 10.41 "That night, Sethra and Veronee stayed in Sethra’s cubicle" didn't sound right to me... I think the double "Sethra", but that may be a matter of opinion?
Chapter 4
page 12.2 "the unmistakable grooves of a huge borer machine tiled the walls in a spiral pattern that made Byron think of the helix of stripes going up a barber’s pole" I would have put it "slick with moisture and the unmistakable grooves of the huge borer machine. The spiral pattern made Byron think..."
page 12.10 "“How...reassuring,” said Zuzana" I would have a space: "How... reassuring"
page 12.11 "It’s nearer end was heavily bolted to the two-meter-width circular catwalk that traversed the Shaft’s perimeter" should be "Its"
page 12.20 "“Not only that, but we need to keep our exposure time as short as possible,” Eddie added." When I read this I thought that it's odd that this is all coming out now... that they probably, if well planned, would have covered that previously. But maybe the planning was not that 'well'??
page 12.33 "circular platform of heavy-gauge aluminum mesh flooring" Do you think "flooring" is required?
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Main Area and Open Discussion / Living Room / Re: 16K word sample of my sci-fi ebook, due on Amazon and B&N in October
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on: June 14, 2013, 09:37:50 AM
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Couple more from me (enjoyed the read!  Hurry up with your writing!!!!  ): Prologue: Page 8 " anti virus" could be "anti-virus" / "antivirus"? Chapter 1: Page 9 "existing infractstructure" should be "infrastructure" Chapter 2: Page 10 "accompanies group pasttimes" should be "pastimes" Page 10 "wiggle-room for screwups" should be "screw-ups" Page 10 " Excute these commands" should be "Execute" Chapter 3: Page 11 "responsibility lays on the shoulders of a leader" I would have said "lies"? Page 11 "ongoing coverup, if there is one" should be "cover-up" or "cover up" Page 11 "heavy plastic toolcase" I would have thought it should be "tool case"? Page 11 "Zuzana unzipped the heavy dufflebag" same for "duffle bag"? Page 11 "The ride to our dropoff point" should be "drop-off" or "drop off" Chapter 4: Page 12 "here for millenia after we’re gone" should be "millennia" About the Author: Page 14 "last few year’s in DonationCoder’s" should be "years" Page 14 "local methodist church" should definitely be "Methodist"
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Main Area and Open Discussion / Living Room / Re: 16K word sample of my sci-fi ebook, due on Amazon and B&N in October
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on: June 13, 2013, 11:12:08 PM
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Are you taking proofreading finds? From page 14: "a" should be "as Sethra tuned out, and subvocalized, “Resume dictation. Dr. Hasser has his head on straight, and the Administrator has his head in the clouds, perhaps saying hello to the aliens, if they’re still up there, and politely and charmingly asking for their help in ‘Project Moving Deeper.’” Sethra grinned and glanced around the circular, twenty meter diameter chamber, trying to take the emotional temperature of the group a a whole. Lots of crossed arms. Even more glazed expressions, though that could be
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Main Area and Open Discussion / Living Room / Another Piece for another Son & Daughter-in-Law's Wedding
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on: March 05, 2013, 05:27:51 AM
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It's just a month since I finished the first mosaic for my middle son (and now wife) and I've got the 3rd Son's done! This one was quite different:The PhotoMosaic was an image of Nathanael and Monica that was made up of photos of their friends and family (that sounds familiar, right?). In the end I had 1,645 photos to work with. The finished image was then colour separated into four separate images comprising the C, M, Y & K layers and then each printed onto A1 transparent sheets. These four A1 transparent sheets were then cut into either 8 landscape tiles or 9 portrait tiles, giving 34 tiles in total. These 34 tiles were then put into envelopes (with instructions) and compiled on the day by the guests, in a slightly random order, giving a slightly random development of the final image: Cyan on Magenta creates a different colour to Cyan on Yellow. Confused? The printer was too, so I created this example to show the printer (and others) so they'd get the idea what I was planning: If you want to read the story behind the mosaic, it's written up in this blog post. I put together an actual time-lapse of the mosaic construction: If you'd like to compare my mock-up with what really happened I did a shortened time-lapse of just the changes here. The PhotoMosaic is up on my site as an Interactive Mosaic as well. Actually, I have a question for any web devs who might know: the Interactive bit is a thumbnail mouseover on an imagemap (through js) with an anchor link to fullsized image that's displayed in a fancybox pop-up. Works fine in Chrome and FireFox but IE (up to fails when clicking on the imagemap to open the image in fancybox. Love an idea or two to get me going... or an idea to work around it?
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Main Area and Open Discussion / Living Room / Re: The Piece for my Son (and Daughter-in-Law)'s Wedding
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on: January 29, 2013, 10:23:51 PM
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You are right ( and I wasn't serious)... but I still find the change concerning as it's like reducing the size of the can of Baked Beans but keeping the price the same. I was also shocked, or maybe 'confronted' is better, by the "Wedding Industry"... how can we let this level of materialism happen? You mention wedding and instantly zeros are added to the price... and the poor couple are emotionally blackmailed with phrases like "your special day". Thankfully our kids got strong heads (from somewhere?): Keren's reception ended up $50 something a head (which I think is extremely reasonable, even if we are paying  ) Goodness only know what it'll be like for their kids (maybe Chris is right and we should start saving now?  ) ...which reminds me I've just about finished The Spirit Level: Why More Equal Societies Almost Always Do Better, which is one of the better books I've ever (nearly) read.
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Main Area and Open Discussion / Living Room / Re: The Piece for my Son (and Daughter-in-Law)'s Wedding
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on: January 28, 2013, 09:17:55 PM
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Thanks guys: I'm not sure when the world changed Chris, but the grooms parents now pay just as much as the brides  (or are we soft touches?  ) I'm now working on my third son's wedding piece, which will actually be printed and manufactured, although along a similar theme: but at least once it's at the printers I wont have performance issues to worry about  I think I'm going to have to go for a walk when these are done: just to clear my head!
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Main Area and Open Discussion / Living Room / The Piece for my Son (and Daughter-in-Law)'s Wedding
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on: January 28, 2013, 05:10:13 AM
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I'm just taking a quick breather from my creative endeavours, as I've just got one off my plate; and I thought you'd be interested in what's keeping me busy... If any of you followed my links to my Bushwalking Mosaics you'll understand where the inspiration for the piece came from, and if you're interested you can read more of the why and how here: I've pulled out the end tile of the animation as the final PhotoMosaic. On the site I've added an interactive version where all the tiles are available as a pop-up thumbnail and full size image; not that you'll know anyone  . So... that's one son down and one more to go (youngest son has his wedding in under 4 weeks)  I think I've got his piece under control...
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Main Area and Open Discussion / General Software Discussion / Re: File sharing advice
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on: December 07, 2012, 05:28:04 AM
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Thanks kilele: I realize that I didn't explicitly say that it is all running without my involvement (except to get the scripts running), so guests dropping photos into a directory works well, or some sort of sync with an online thing could work too, but I think I'm definitely leaning toward: WiFi definitely.
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Main Area and Open Discussion / General Software Discussion / Re: File sharing advice
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on: December 07, 2012, 03:04:06 AM
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You could set up a Flickr account or another quicky easy enough with a simple password. I don't think an App is needed. Just log in and upload from any phone or computer.
Yes, that's got some legs... set up a new account and share the password... I'd have to investigate if notification is given on new uploads so that a script could go and grab them (hmmm... plus internet access  ) Lots of good thoughts to play with... thanks
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Main Area and Open Discussion / General Software Discussion / Re: File sharing advice
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on: December 07, 2012, 12:44:52 AM
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Another alternative to the removing the Delete permission would be a script/program that watches for new files and spirits them away to another non-shared folder for safety.
Yes, that's what I'm doing with the other scripts... watching for removable drives connecting and copying off the photos. Thanks for the suggestions... the head is starting to catch up now 
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Main Area and Open Discussion / General Software Discussion / Re: File sharing advice
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on: December 06, 2012, 11:14:48 PM
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Do you know how many phones have WiFi... majority?
I don't think I'll be able to cater for everyone, but the more the merrier.
So I could take my Router, and I presume that it'll set up WiFi without a DSL connection?, and give everyone the password which will give them access to the shared directory... I can see that working: particularly like the no-cost element.
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